tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post1608510487402994451..comments2023-06-08T20:01:39.136+10:00Comments on Australian Haiku: Emma Dallowayhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02762502184477362139noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-87238977585575678072009-05-22T09:55:36.726+10:002009-05-22T09:55:36.726+10:00a thoughtful rewrite - I'll think about that one. ...a thoughtful rewrite - I'll think about that one. Cheers BillEmma Dallowayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02762502184477362139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-42385771387107654542009-05-21T07:06:55.791+10:002009-05-21T07:06:55.791+10:00I might try this without "turn to," although that ...I might try this without "turn to," although that would affect the syllable count and rhythm. Sometimes it's fun to flip 'em and see what happens<br /><br />the city breathes . . .<br />an abandoned silo<br />faces the moonBillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10717622168200846486noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-11840818917073318632009-05-14T10:15:00.000+10:002009-05-14T10:15:00.000+10:00always happy to help, Harpsalways happy to help, HarpsEmma Dallowayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02762502184477362139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-50512571799271099662009-05-14T09:51:00.000+10:002009-05-14T09:51:00.000+10:00Thankyou for the silo word. Just what I was lookin...Thankyou for the silo word. Just what I was looking for a couple of days ago.comrade harpshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16868307582875295395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-2780890821361117412009-05-13T12:51:00.000+10:002009-05-13T12:51:00.000+10:00Ralf, Magyar, Devika - I enjoy reading the way you...Ralf, Magyar, Devika - I enjoy reading the way you suck every idea out of three lines, its a pleasure to read.<br /><br />And thank you all for your comments.Emma Dallowayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02762502184477362139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-61788106810250650612009-05-13T12:20:00.000+10:002009-05-13T12:20:00.000+10:00It is called progress when a city becomes larger b...It is called progress when a city becomes larger but the beauty of the land soon disappears in cement and steel structures...how sad.<br />I really like the thoughts and feelings this evokes Emma.Janice Thomsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02506920585319893814noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-73008267971486348192009-05-13T10:02:00.000+10:002009-05-13T10:02:00.000+10:00'the city breathes', i like your summation in Line...'the city breathes', i like your summation in Line 3<br /><br />much love<br />gillenaGillena Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09191865405561549074noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-29334121643155905822009-05-13T06:43:00.000+10:002009-05-13T06:43:00.000+10:00again, a unique and intriguing juxtaposition.
and ...again, a unique and intriguing juxtaposition.<br />and it works very wellpolonahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12631341810150848122noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-48056620080307318522009-05-12T15:04:00.000+10:002009-05-12T15:04:00.000+10:00very nice capturevery nice captureJ. Andrew Lockharthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12567156257114496618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-77487310912218576202009-05-12T13:09:00.000+10:002009-05-12T13:09:00.000+10:00Moon is a silent witness to it all,
'Abandoned' -...Moon is a silent witness to it all, <br />'Abandoned' -- i think of it as a state of our mind...silos could be maintained and put to use anytime, <br /><br />fine haiku,Dalloway :)<br /><br />wishes, <br />devikaDevika Jyothihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02349153846127145464noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-40827392270075629852009-05-12T09:38:00.000+10:002009-05-12T09:38:00.000+10:00_So often, the cities creep toward, then overcome ..._So often, the cities creep toward, then overcome the farmlands; the abandoned silos may then face the moon and ask... why? <br />_A fine one Dalloway!<br />_mMagyarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14834296565844877410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7414865852217989753.post-43340490900569492822009-05-12T09:00:00.000+10:002009-05-12T09:00:00.000+10:00On the first sight, there is countryside. Then the...On the first sight, there is countryside. Then there is a romantic night - and suddenly you make me think I am in the middle of the city. And who knows what sort of silo this one is. Something in the case of emergency? Or something to attack or to repay attacks. Good one.<br /><br />Best wishes<br />RalfRalf Brökerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08602494065251750620noreply@blogger.com