Yeah, ok... I had to look up what a currawong was. Glad to learn something new.I like this. I only wonder if the word "unnatural" isn't "telling" rather than "showing"? I wonder if there isn't an imagistic way to express the same idea? What I imagine is a foreboding sky. Rather than the sky, the water brings to shore the drowned bird. The tide carries it in, hinting at death.I wonder what you've been reading...
Its a dramatic one, Dalloway...and I wonder why you choose not to put the words in the picture, it could have made a great composition, what the tide brings in often is taken back...and to and fro -- back and forth, it moves with the waves, wishes, devika
okay, Dalloway...But,i would love to see that once your computer works :)devika
Hey Devika, I would love to turn this into a haiga but my computer is getting fixed!
My thoughts go along with Patrick's. On the other hand I see the first line as a very poetic verse in the western style: a reflection, a pardox. Of course this is not really going by the books: but how to succeed by not touching the borders? Anyway I like this might-be-a-haiku-but-it-is-a-very-poetic-thing-verse. (If I had written it, the first line was in italics or in quotation marks. I am a chicken, right ;-)?Best wishesRalf
thats very kind of you Ralf. I had wondered whether it was too obscure
What a lovely, lovely photo....
the currawong -returning in the tide's watery skyI've couldn't stop thinking about it...
an excellent piece of collaboration across the Pacific!!!! I like it
I definitely appreciate this haiga, Dalloway :)the picture has a true haunting feel,wishes, devika
yep, like it better now. sometimes revisions are needed after tings have percalated through for several days, aren't they?
Good one, I'm always partial to a bit of reflection. I like the fact that some birds might genuinely float / swim on the water, but some only through this inversion.
The new picture is interesting. I can't decide whether it looks more menacing - reminds me of a negative.
Thanks for taking the time to write something.