A good picture and an interesting haïku. Why do you write "a mistake" ?
Really lovely haiku.Great blog :)
Beautiful to look at, but I'll have to think about the words...The gap between carriages? No, not a mistake.The personal reason for taking the train, maybe. Yep, I'll give it that meaning.Intriguing.
This one goes on and on.
Enigmatic, and compelling ...(and refreshing up here in the northern hemisphere on a hot day to read about winter :) )
You know how I like trains, Em.This reminds me of 1959, a trip to Chicago...that stifling, Puritanical hypocrisy of the era.
welcome back with a great one
Love the photo collage as well as the verse and how it is placed. Nice to see you back.
I see a reference to other poems (for example http://www.songlyrics.com/tiamat/a-winter-shadow-lyrics/). Anyway: this haiga is brilliant.Best wishesRalf
cheers folk. lovely to see you all here - and its great to be back, albeit briefly. welcome short poemsMarcel, Harps the haiga was inspired by a memory that just wont go away... Melissa, lovely to see you here.. Im enjoying your blog.
nice composition the shadowy tones resonate well the 'mistake' (now i have an understanding of it)much lovegillena
A very interesting composition and puzzling, not just about "mistake," but also the text in the background. I've tried to read it, but can pick out only some words. Seems like a page from a text book or an essay. It certainly has me guessing.Adelaide
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Hi Adelaide, GillenaLovely to see you here. The background text comes from Aldo Rossi's "The Architecture of the City" and is a very oblique reference to this horrible memory that just keeps coming back.
a striking haiga, Dalloway...very effective, its been a long time and understand you are more into studies...look foward to see more :)wishesdevika
Many thanks Devika, lovely to see you here!
I love train haiku, and this is one I love!all my best,AlanThe With Words International Online Haiku Competition 2010: With Words.
Thanks for taking the time to write something.