Wednesday, June 23, 2010


a train's
winter shadow - always
that one mistake

17 comments:

  1. A good picture and an interesting haïku.
    Why do you write "a mistake" ?

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  2. Really lovely haiku.
    Great blog :)

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  3. Beautiful to look at, but I'll have to think about the words...

    The gap between carriages? No, not a mistake.

    The personal reason for taking the train, maybe. Yep, I'll give it that meaning.

    Intriguing.

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  4. This one goes on and on.

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  5. Enigmatic, and compelling ...
    (and refreshing up here in the northern hemisphere on a hot day to read about winter :) )

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  6. You know how I like trains, Em.
    This reminds me of 1959, a trip to Chicago...
    that stifling, Puritanical hypocrisy of the era.

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  7. welcome back with a great one

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  8. Love the photo collage as well as the verse and how it is placed. Nice to see you back.

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  9. I see a reference to other poems (for example http://www.songlyrics.com/tiamat/a-winter-shadow-lyrics/). Anyway: this haiga is brilliant.

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  10. cheers folk. lovely to see you all here - and its great to be back, albeit briefly. welcome short poems

    Marcel, Harps the haiga was inspired by a memory that just wont go away...

    Melissa, lovely to see you here.. Im enjoying your blog.

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  11. nice composition the shadowy tones resonate well the 'mistake' (now i have an understanding of it)

    much love
    gillena

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  12. A very interesting composition and puzzling, not just about "mistake," but also the text in the background. I've tried to read it, but can pick out only some words. Seems like a page from a text book or an essay. It certainly has me guessing.

    Adelaide

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  14. Hi Adelaide, Gillena

    Lovely to see you here.

    The background text comes from Aldo Rossi's "The Architecture of the City" and is a very oblique reference to this horrible memory that just keeps coming back.

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  15. a striking haiga, Dalloway...very effective,

    its been a long time and understand you are more into studies...look foward to see more :)

    wishes
    devika

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  16. Many thanks Devika, lovely to see you here!

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  17. I love train haiku, and this is one I love!
    all my best,

    Alan
    The With Words International Online Haiku Competition 2010: With Words
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