Friday, July 31, 2009


upturned sky
the tide carries in
a currawong

15 comments:

  1. Yeah, ok... I had to look up what a currawong was. Glad to learn something new.

    I like this. I only wonder if the word "unnatural" isn't "telling" rather than "showing"? I wonder if there isn't an imagistic way to express the same idea? What I imagine is a foreboding sky. Rather than the sky, the water brings to shore the drowned bird. The tide carries it in, hinting at death.

    I wonder what you've been reading...

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  2. Its a dramatic one, Dalloway...and I wonder why you choose not to put the words in the picture, it could have made a great composition,

    what the tide brings in often is taken back...and to and fro -- back and forth, it moves with the waves,

    wishes,
    devika

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  3. okay, Dalloway...But,i would love to see that once your computer works :)

    devika

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  4. Hey Devika, I would love to turn this into a haiga but my computer is getting fixed!

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  5. My thoughts go along with Patrick's. On the other hand I see the first line as a very poetic verse in the western style: a reflection, a pardox. Of course this is not really going by the books: but how to succeed by not touching the borders? Anyway I like this might-be-a-haiku-but-it-is-a-very-poetic-thing-verse.

    (If I had written it, the first line was in italics or in quotation marks. I am a chicken, right ;-)?

    Best wishes
    Ralf

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  6. thats very kind of you Ralf. I had wondered whether it was too obscure

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  7. What a lovely, lovely photo....

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  8. the currawong -
    returning in the tide's watery
    sky

    I've couldn't stop thinking about it...

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  9. an excellent piece of collaboration across the Pacific!!!! I like it

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  10. I definitely appreciate this haiga, Dalloway :)

    the picture has a true haunting feel,

    wishes,
    devika

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  11. yep, like it better now. sometimes revisions are needed after tings have percalated through for several days, aren't they?

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  12. Good one, I'm always partial to a bit of reflection. I like the fact that some birds might genuinely float / swim on the water, but some only through this inversion.

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  13. The new picture is interesting. I can't decide whether it looks more menacing - reminds me of a negative.

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