a lot said in this. beautifully said, too.
Many thanks. I liked this one.
i loved the subtlty in this, Nice one, Dallowaywishes, devika
Dalloway, thanks for your comment on Shelley's Sonnet! I get very few comments on these posts even though they're getting hundreds of readers - probably high school and college students.I agree with Devika. This is a fine haiku and subtle. I imagine a warm night and calm sea. There's no reason to wear anything more than the thinnest blouse - something that even the lightest feather can find it's way through.As always, I admire the freshness and originality of your haiku.
Thanks Devika and Patrick, I was starting feel like giving up.
Never give up!_In short... this is a lovely haiku that collects the jetty, the bird that shed the feather, and the wearer of the blouse into... one fine thought._m
A bit surreal on first sight. But the thinnest blouse isn't a textile, ist it? I like it very much.Best wishesRalf
I like the haiku touch of focusing on the small, with the lightest of touches of haiku humour.all my best,AlanWith Words Online Haiku Competition.
evocativeand provocative -nice
Thanks for taking the time to write something.