Dalloway, thanks for your comment on Shelley's Sonnet! I get very few comments on these posts even though they're getting hundreds of readers - probably high school and college students.
I agree with Devika. This is a fine haiku and subtle. I imagine a warm night and calm sea. There's no reason to wear anything more than the thinnest blouse - something that even the lightest feather can find it's way through.
As always, I admire the freshness and originality of your haiku.
Never give up! _In short... this is a lovely haiku that collects the jetty, the bird that shed the feather, and the wearer of the blouse into... one fine thought. _m
a lot said in this. beautifully said, too.
ReplyDeleteMany thanks. I liked this one.
ReplyDeletei loved the subtlty in this,
ReplyDeleteNice one, Dalloway
wishes,
devika
Dalloway, thanks for your comment on Shelley's Sonnet! I get very few comments on these posts even though they're getting hundreds of readers - probably high school and college students.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Devika. This is a fine haiku and subtle. I imagine a warm night and calm sea. There's no reason to wear anything more than the thinnest blouse - something that even the lightest feather can find it's way through.
As always, I admire the freshness and originality of your haiku.
Thanks Devika and Patrick, I was starting feel like giving up.
ReplyDeleteNever give up!
ReplyDelete_In short... this is a lovely haiku that collects the jetty, the bird that shed the feather, and the wearer of the blouse into... one fine thought.
_m
A bit surreal on first sight. But the thinnest blouse isn't a textile, ist it? I like it very much.
ReplyDeleteBest wishes
Ralf
I like the haiku touch of focusing on the small, with the lightest of touches of haiku humour.
ReplyDeleteall my best,
Alan
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evocative
ReplyDeleteand provocative -
nice