Oh its time I did make a show in your corner of the world, because you have certainly made such a wonderful showing in mine. I love both of these haiku, and as one who has spent much serious time doing things such as popping bubbles (counting spots?), I can also relate. mrow
these are delightful... the aha! moment in the first, and the gentle humour in the second
Hi Dalloway!I agree with Polona on both.The first is a strong haiku - really original. Wow! The second is more of a senryu. It glows with your personality. I only wonder if, instead of saying "the serious business", there isn't a way to convey the same idea through imagery?
yeah, Im sure there is poemshape. sometimes I get the words in my head and I just cant shake them.
Loved the first one, Very striking, Dalloway..wishesdevika
love the second one.bubbles are serious business...
Thanks for taking the time to write something.