Saturday, February 21, 2009


withered bird
in the leaf litter ~
paper cut

Paper Wasp, Autumn 2009








summer afternoon
the serious business
of popping bubbles

6 comments:

  1. Oh its time I did make a show in your corner of the world, because you have certainly made such a wonderful showing in mine. I love both of these haiku, and as one who has spent much serious time doing things such as popping bubbles (counting spots?), I can also relate. mrow

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  2. these are delightful... the aha! moment in the first, and the gentle humour in the second

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  3. Hi Dalloway!

    I agree with Polona on both.

    The first is a strong haiku - really original. Wow!

    The second is more of a senryu. It glows with your personality. I only wonder if, instead of saying "the serious business", there isn't a way to convey the same idea through imagery?

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  4. yeah, Im sure there is poemshape. sometimes I get the words in my head and I just cant shake them.

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  5. Loved the first one,
    Very striking, Dalloway..

    wishes
    devika

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  6. love the second one.
    bubbles are serious business...

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