Oh its time I did make a show in your corner of the world, because you have certainly made such a wonderful showing in mine. I love both of these haiku, and as one who has spent much serious time doing things such as popping bubbles (counting spots?), I can also relate. mrow
The first is a strong haiku - really original. Wow!
The second is more of a senryu. It glows with your personality. I only wonder if, instead of saying "the serious business", there isn't a way to convey the same idea through imagery?
Oh its time I did make a show in your corner of the world, because you have certainly made such a wonderful showing in mine. I love both of these haiku, and as one who has spent much serious time doing things such as popping bubbles (counting spots?), I can also relate. mrow
ReplyDeletethese are delightful... the aha! moment in the first, and the gentle humour in the second
ReplyDeleteHi Dalloway!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Polona on both.
The first is a strong haiku - really original. Wow!
The second is more of a senryu. It glows with your personality. I only wonder if, instead of saying "the serious business", there isn't a way to convey the same idea through imagery?
yeah, Im sure there is poemshape. sometimes I get the words in my head and I just cant shake them.
ReplyDeleteLoved the first one,
ReplyDeleteVery striking, Dalloway..
wishes
devika
love the second one.
ReplyDeletebubbles are serious business...